PROS:- A few solid ideas ( like the anemia thing in the eginning) .- Great opening.CONS:- Cringe-worthy writing.- Has n't been proofread/edited enough; too many errors.- Terrible at foreshadowing; Chekhov 's gun much?- Thesaurus abuse and neglect.- Very little " showing " and too much " telling " .- After page 13, the story dipped.- Poor character development and male protagonist is a moron.- Too many useless minor characters.- Story was as bland as the characters.- Trying too hard.- Obvious villain was obvious.- No chemistry between Greg and Lissianna ( love interest and protag respectively) .- Misogynistic, sexist, and objectifying.- Cringe-worthy dialogue.COMMENTS: Let me preface this by claiming that I love porn, smut, and sex.
It seeme like Sands was trying oo hard to accept them unique personalities but it did n't take.
They ll had inauthentic characteristics and, quite rankly, they ha a little cheesy.What I meant by " showing vs telling " was that I say to be hown what the characters ook like versus just telling the audience that they 're attractive.
I wil pull a 1-line description out of my ass and that will show you more of how a character looks than Sands can write in a book.
This escription was very captivating and I ca lready imagine how they looked throughout the nove without having to try ( yay eurocentricism because western features are the only features that are beautiful /sarcasm).
He was confronted by strangers and, nstead of talking about his life being tied up and all, he 'd fantasize about being a sex slave to his offenders.The closest thing to a non-sexual connection they had going on was when he anted to " tak her when she was sad " ( the cheesiness in this ook has just gone through the roof).
Twilight had useless minor characters ( like Mike, Jessica, etc) as does this book ( the brother).
Each of the eight cousins went into Greg 's room to ask that he not be mad at Lissianna for keeping him hostage and each begged him to cure her phobia ... ONE.
I was ready to throw he book out the window but I like to give every book a chance ( and I decided to eturn he book and et my$ 8 back) ... so I kept reading.The book was trying so hard in all areas possible.
I do n't have as big of a problem with nanotechnology in Atlantis ( look at Disney 's Atlantis: The Lost Empire; I know that 's pretty advanced) but there were o many differen things that drowned out the sci-fi idea.
He 's the sort of person who thinks pickup lines like " Neve, you 're girl? " would work.The other cousins were also annoying because of how bland the dialogue between everyone was and how useless they were.
I will ithhold this information for anyone who agrees to writ it buuuut HINT* HINT: Less than halfway through he memoir, you 're reminde that they ave a room full of crosses and that they put garlic in Lissianna 's food ... all on one page.Great marketing device ( cover, synopsis, etc) but the actual product was a uge isappointment.
I think Sands was just writing it as she went along and had no idea how he story should end.